workshopping first draft

The biggest problem i had with the story is that it ends without a clear confirmation to whether or not the mouse was caught or not.  However throughout the whole story you keep relating how the mouse impacts the way you are and how he affects the way you think about yourself.  One thing I would ask yourself is do all the details relate to a central focus? Very descriptive details about the mouse when chasing throughout the house. Why does this story matter? Establish more of a connection between the mouse and how the relationship with the mouse affects your process of thinking at that point in your life. Were where you in the opening paragraph, explain more about setting.  Try to make your tone more up beat and not so melancholy i wanna say.